Although revision on Vengeance Will Come has only just begun I’m reasonably happy with the progress so far.
Here’s a summary of what I’m looking at:
I’mCutting outsuperfluous words. Not just the occasional word in a sentence, but also entire sentences. For example, the following line of dialogue:
“Physical muscles are less important than mental strength and wisdom, neither of which is guaranteed by age.”
I originally wrote it as a subtle dig at a character that he was physically weak, to feed a sense of inadequacy. That reference is no longer required and its presence is now out-of-place. It adds no value and causes only distraction. The delete key fixed that.
- Word choice. Sometimes I’m using the same word in quick succession and that is poor form. (Sidebar: A previous Writing Excuses podcast I listened to mentioned that there are some words you can only use once in a story).
- Using contractions in dialogue. This, strangely doesn’t come naturally to me. Although I speak with them, for some reason I write long-form. My flow-of-consciousness dialogue tends to be formal and so feels scripted. It was something an earlier version alpha reader detected, and I was trying to fix this… obviously I missed a lot. I suspect the further into the story the less I detected.
- being more descriptive about motion and emotion; trying to show in a more nuanced way, instead of telling the reader.
- Evaluating the criticisms of my beta readers, and adjusting accordingly (more about that in another post).
…Meets Productivity Moat
But then my forward progress is halted, midway through chapter 2 (of 29). I’ve hit a piece of text that’s really slowing me down: a productivity moat that’s blocking my path.
I’m not happy with the paragraph of text and are indecisive about wording and positioning. Several times I have opened up the document and sat there looking at it, as though it were written in Swahili (which I can’t read). After an annoying ten minutes of staring, my enthusiasm begins to wane. Stupid moat. I’ve tried to skip it and move on, but it’s like I know it’s there like an enemy at my flank and it’s on my mind.
I have a new strategy. To be honest it’s not much different from my previous strategies, but often I’ve found writing is a mind game. So if my slightly modified strategy works – hooray. They say you need an edge over your enemy: not a whole new weapon, just an edge.
I’m going to:
- Highlight the paragraph, admit to myself that I currently lack the ability to solve it and I can’t allow it to slow me down.
- Write some extensive comments: what I think is wrong with it (why I am having difficulty) and any possible options I can see to fix it in the future. I’m going to try to be descriptive e.g. “Z might work but that would require Y (which I don’t have)”.
- I’m going to move on, having done everything I can currently.
- At a later date, either at the end or when the answer presents itself, I’ll go back and fix it.
The productivity moat may cause a change in strategy, but it won’t stop me.